My tutor recommended me to re-edit the final assignment. His critique was mainly about the narrative and wrong English:I did have some trouble following your narrative and your English
subtitles though. Robert also proposed me his structure which I could follow and make the story more clear. Here is the result:
Robert's comment: It's 100% better. Quite professional, flows well and you've put the pieces together coherently. Only a few English errors (during) but these are minor. Well done.