I agree that the last "meditation" shot was inserted too early and a thought should have been inserted before it. My original intention was that the writer become famous and will have a problem with drinking. I think there is a need to show more thoughts. Some idea: the first thought should be a simple shot of the typewriter, second he is writing, third he receives his first published book, the fourth he receives a price - a shot of price, fifth: there could be a shot of a shelf with prices, sixth: the drinking scene, seventh: he has not the drinking under control (homeless), eight: he changes his life (mediation).
I was surprised how Stuart was very close with interpretations of the sequences, even the second was abstract one. There was missing information at the end of the first attempt - there is a writer who received his first published book. The second sequence was about man who is looking for a love but he never receive it.
If I compare sequences from student fellows I think that shots of thoughts where is not the character are most impressive. For example: those shots of things let you think how the character is connected to them, it allows you to imagine a story on your experience, our mind analyses it and tries to explain it somehow. On the other hand, when there was the character in "thoughts" I had a feeling that we are looking on a past, something which already happened. Just my thoughts.
(Just an idea crossed my mind: the sequence could be shorter and explain his current state about his laziness e.g.: he want to write a book (typewriter) but he could not resist to play games (shot of a game machine, drinking scene etc.)).